Assessment for final draft of documentary

Self 


Peer


Teacher


WWW


EBI

Ancillaries final draft

This is the final draft of the ancillaries

Newspaper advert

WWW

- layout making the image and text visible

- image idea of old vs new

EBI

- make the caption draw the reader more into the advert

Double page spread

WWW

- colour layout and visible hierarchy

- good coloumn layout

EBI

- not have text over image - difficult to read

Evolution of Technology Final draft

This is the final draft for the documentary:



WWW
- better structure
- good mise en scene for interview
EBI
- better sound

Storyboard final draft

This is the storyboard for the final draft.

Short term and long term plan for final draft

This plan will help us to organise our time properly and to be able to finish filming for the deadline.

Short term plan

Date and Time	Location	Risk Assessment (Health and Safety)	Costume/Props Needed	Equipment Needed
25/02/12 1 – 4pm Sunny	Harrow St Anns shopping centre Location is public and can film without permission	All crew are healthy and fit to film Breaks and food (Fast food restaurants nearby) Equipment carried in bags and monitor equipment  in crowds of people	Presenter: Casual clothing Props: Image from GTA for public interviews	Camera, tripod
26/02/12 1-5pm sunny	Harrow St Anns shopping centre Location is public and can film without permission	All crew are healthy and fit to film Breaks and food (Fast food restaurants nearby) Equipment carried in bags and monitor equipment  in crowds of people	Presenter: Casual clothing Props: Image from GTA for public interviews	Camera, tripod

Long term plan

Week 1 from 7th April	Week 2	Week 3
Evaluation of third draft. Start filming.	Start editing the draft. Film again if necessary.	Finish opening sequence and finish evaluation.

Assessment for draft 3

Self assessment: 

Peer assessment:

Teacher assessment:

WWW

EBI

Grade:

Targets to improve:

Evolution of Technology Draft 3

This is the third draft of our Documentary



WWW
- included music
- monatage
EBI
- presenter when interviewing public - needs to look less like the public 
To improve
- sound 

Ancillaries draft 3

This is draft three of the ancillary with my notes of what went well and what needs to be improved.

Newspaper advert:

WWW
- image simple and similar to channel 5 adverts
EBI
- not have the text on top of the image - difficult to see

Double page spread:
WWW
- good colour layout
- some visible hierarchy
- good heading 
EBI
- better column layout - pull quote looks out of place
- heading to difficult to see


Targets to improve:
- black box made transparent to made the text easier to read
- made image less busy

Script draft 3

• This is the draft we used for our third draft of the documentary.It has the headings to show in what section of the structure the script is in. 

• Script draft three
• Throughout the years technology has developed dramatically from simple devices to more complexdevices that do more than its function.
• Computers are now an important part of society but does the use of computers lead to decreasingsocial skills. The increase of social networking sites mean that people can now socialise online butwhat affect is this having on society. The languages skills of pupils in full time education can beaffected by the use of social networking sites like msn. We ask English teachers whether languagehas been affected by social networking sites and if language is becoming lazy.
• Nowadays the games that are advertised involve physical interaction but what physical damage isthis having on our bodys. Games consoles like wii and kinect are marketed as exercise but is ithealthier to ride a bicycle outside or on the wii.
• The Mobile phone which once used as a device to make phone calls can now do things like takepictures, access the internet, send and receive messages and listen to music. With so many apps andthe development of smart phones this raises the question: how many people actually use theirphones to make phone calls alone.
• Introduction of episode:
• The representation of gender has dramatically changed over the years from the damsel in distress tohyper sexualised females. Some have even become the heroines and main characters. Players canchoose their characters and make them look however they want. We will be comparing princesspeach in Mario to the females in grand theft auto and Lara croft in tomb raider.
• There has been a movement from pixelated images to computer generated images known as CGIs.This immerses the player into the game because the images in the video games resemble the objectsin our everyday lives. The improvement of technology has meant that the graphics in video gameshas also improved for example in previous video games like sonic, the main character sonic wouldhave to jump on the baddie to get rid of them but in modern video games like assassins creed whenthe player kills the bad guys stabbing, shooting and bloody scenes are shown.
• The violent images in video games shows that the violence in video games has increased. In videogames such as grand theft auto, assassins creed and la noir players can inflict violence on thecharacters and commit all sorts of crimes without the game showing the real consequences of theiractions.
• Development
• In modern video games women have been highly sexualised it is estimated that 28%of women arerepresented as sex objects in video games. This statistic can be seen when you compare the damselin distress in Mario to the prostitutes in grand theft auto. The character princess peach in Mario ispresented with blonde hair wearing a pink dress which is the typical stereotype of a female.Nowadays due to the role of women changing, in games like grand theft auto women are presentedwith large breasts, large hips and very revealing clothes. So does this representation mean that womens role in the media is to be a sex object? We asked members of the public what theythought of this poster advertising grand theft auto: vice city. After asking members of the publicwhat they thought of the way women are represented in modern video games, we visited theconvent of Jesus and Mary language college and asked an expert sociologist about what she thoughtof women being sexualised in video games.
• Join us after the break when we will be looking at how some video games have represented femalesas independent heroines in games like tomb raider and final fantasy.

Short term and long term plan for draft 3

This plan will help us to organise our time properly and to be able to finish filming for the deadline.

Short term

Long term

Week 1 from 7th April	Week 2	Week 3
Evaluation of third draft. Start filming.	Start editing the draft. Film again if necessary.	Finish opening sequence and finish evaluation.

Assessment for draft 2

Self assessment: 

Peer assessment:

Teacher assessment:

WWW

-

EBI

-

Grade:

Targets to improve:

Evolution of Technology Draft 2

This is the second draft of our Documentary

WWW
- different range of technologies and the comparisons
EBI
- better settings
To improve
- less montage 

Ancillaries draft 2

This is draft two of the ancillary with what  I thought went well and what could be improved.

Newspaper advert:
WWW
- the simple image
EBI

- more colour and have a better layout

Double page spread:
WWW
- some visual hierarchy can be seen
EBI
- have a less range of colour e.g one colour with different tones of it
- have a more organised layout

Targets to improve:

- Develop the images more - e.g old technology with new

Script draft 2

This is the script for draft two. It has been colour coded to represent the different parts of the documentary structure. 

Short term and long term plan for draft 2

This plan will help us to organise our time properly and to be able to finish filming for the deadline.

Short term

Long term

Week 1 from 7th April	Week 2	Week 3
Evaluation of third draft. Start filming.	Start editing the draft. Film again if necessary.	Finish opening sequence and finish evaluation.

Assessments for draft 1

TO VIEW LARGE,OPEN IMAGE IN NEW WINDOW


Self assessment: 
Documentary

Ancillary

Peer assessment:
Documentary

Ancillaries

Teacher assessment:
Documentary
Ancillaries
WWW


EBI


Grade:


Targets to improve:

Ancillaries draft 1

This is the first draft of the ancillary with the what my group and I thought what went well and even better if. 

Newspaper advert:
WWW
- simple image thats not distracting
EBI
- change the text to channel 5 style
- make the image more relevant to the evolution of technology








Double page spread:
WWW
-
EBI
- put colour and image
- have less text and more simply laid out


Targets to improve:
- put more time into the ancillary 
- look at more inspirational adverts and double page spreads to understand the conventional background image

Evolution of Technology Draft 1

This is the first draft of our Documentary:

WWW
- good use of type writer for title - shows the contrast of old style writting with the text 'technology'
- good range of montage
EBI
- to quick - difficult to understand
To improve
- make the setting more relevant to games